Agnishatdal Ashwin 1427, September 2020 critique by SB

 

Agnishatdal Ashwin 1427 September 2020

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Critique by SB

Agnishatdal Ashwin 1427 September 2020

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By your good old editor! Few words about the works of my much cherished authors. So the critiques will be honest, short and sweet!

Dhaki by Labanya: Beautiful poem, it is sad to think about them, those who leave their loved ones during festivals and come to give others happiness, like the drummers an essential part of true Durgapuja.

The great Indian Nautanki by saptarchi: Well time proved Saptarchi right, we know how well the clowns are running the country during this horrible crisis, but majority of Indians prefer not to accept it.

Fogline by Brieuc Martin Onraet 6: The improvements we have over Gorillas are quite good!

When Gold went on a trip by Raghunandan Kuppuswamy: This was a very beautifully written story that kept the curiosity up till the end and the happy ending made things perfect.

Meera Chase by Troy David Loy: I really will love to read a long story or maybe a complete novel on Meera, he has given her a very interesting character.

You cannot grasp… by Dom Collucci: Very beautifully described the wisdom of sages- we are surrounded by temptations that we care not to acknowledge as temptations and fall!

Bitter Pill dose 35 by Bitter Pill: Secular India 2: Secular India was always biased against Hindus, hope when the fanatics are gone the next government will respect the huge majorities of this country so that they don’t become thugs again.

Crows 5 by Brendan: Brendan certainly gives his words a life, the beautiful union of two spirits was captured perfectly. So were the feelings of the narrator.

The Tilbaroo station by Pat Ritters 3: This story is so heart-warming, love the tenderness that Pat has created surrounding the newlyweds, so much in love with each other. Waiting to know about the world they are going to create together.

I believe that will be it for my critique as an editor, you will have to read the rest in Ezine. Of course there is truckloads of more works there!