Agnimalya January 2019 Critique
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By Troy David Loy https://www.amazon.com/author/troyloy
Efiles:
Detective Agni gets briefed on her target, and having gotten the testimony she needs, quickly brings down the villain. A fitting conclusion to this serial! It seems a bit heavy on explanation and light on action in places, but then this is a detective story, not an action story, and that’s often common for the genre.
The Scorpion Man:
Deathstinger wants a wife, but not of his people, the scorpion folk, instead a girl of the tiny Inchlines. He takes one from her home, but soon becomes angry with his choice!
His would-be bride grows despondent, listless, and is soon returned to her people by his own scorpion children. This one was interesting, and I’d like to see more of the Inchlines and Scorpion Folk in future stories.
Surya:
A young woman is traumatized, and kept in an orphanage after the death of her parents. Those responsible for her trauma are being killed, though, one by one, and her caretakers decide to find out how! Will they uncover something beyond ordinary explanation? I’d like to see this one continued, but I’m unsure that that’s the idea, as the ending is a bit ambiguous as to that to my reader’s eye.
The Argument:
A young girl faces a writing deadline, when she meets a pair of talking insects in competition demanding that she write about one of them. When one grows to enormous size, she suddenly gets an idea for her project, giant insect or not! This one was pretty cool, with a good narrative feel.
https://patreon.com/sharmishthabasu
By Troy David Loy https://www.amazon.com/author/troyloy
Efiles:
Detective Agni gets briefed on her target, and having gotten the testimony she needs, quickly brings down the villain. A fitting conclusion to this serial! It seems a bit heavy on explanation and light on action in places, but then this is a detective story, not an action story, and that’s often common for the genre.
The Scorpion Man:
Deathstinger wants a wife, but not of his people, the scorpion folk, instead a girl of the tiny Inchlines. He takes one from her home, but soon becomes angry with his choice!
His would-be bride grows despondent, listless, and is soon returned to her people by his own scorpion children. This one was interesting, and I’d like to see more of the Inchlines and Scorpion Folk in future stories.
Surya:
A young woman is traumatized, and kept in an orphanage after the death of her parents. Those responsible for her trauma are being killed, though, one by one, and her caretakers decide to find out how! Will they uncover something beyond ordinary explanation? I’d like to see this one continued, but I’m unsure that that’s the idea, as the ending is a bit ambiguous as to that to my reader’s eye.
The Argument:
A young girl faces a writing deadline, when she meets a pair of talking insects in competition demanding that she write about one of them. When one grows to enormous size, she suddenly gets an idea for her project, giant insect or not! This one was pretty cool, with a good narrative feel.
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